| name | cold-email |
| description | Write cold outreach emails and multi-touch sequences that convert without feeling spammy — for customers AND for founder asks (raising an angel round, asking for intros or advice). Use when drafting cold email to strangers, a reactivation/winback sequence, a founder-to-user note, a product launch blast, an investor/fundraising email, or any outbound email where the recipient doesn't already know you. Triggers on: "write a cold email", "cold outreach", "email sequence", "drip campaign", "reactivation email", "winback", "launch email", "convert signups", "raise email", "angel investor email", "ask for an intro", "this email feels too salesy/AI/spammy", "make this sound human / like a founder". Covers the voice rules that kill the "AI wrote this" tell, subject lines, the 5-line structure, multi-email sequencing, CTAs, discount/offer framing, and the founder-ask variant (traction-first, ask-for-help-not-money).
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Cold Email
Outbound email that converts. Distilled from Adrianna Lakatos's Cold Outreach Bible plus hard-won
edits from real founder sends. The whole discipline reduces to one idea: a converting cold email
does not look or sound like a campaign. It looks like a human typed it to one person in 90 seconds.
Everything below serves that. When in doubt, make it more human, shorter, and more about them.
The first decision: plain or designed?
This is the highest-leverage choice and people get it backwards.
- Cold strangers → plain text. No logo header, no hero image, no brand-colored button, no big
centered footer. That chrome is exactly what a stranger's brain files as "marketing" — and once
filed, it's ignored or reported. Use a bare visible URL (
heygaia.io/pricing) instead of a
button. Carry only a one-line unsubscribe for legal compliance.
- Opted-in / warm list → designed is fine. People who know you tolerate and even expect polish.
If you're tempted to add a logo to a cold email, don't. The plainness is the conversion mechanic.
The voice rules (how to not sound like AI)
This is the part most drafts fail. AI prose has tells. Hunt them down and kill them:
- No triads. "The inbox. The messages. The scheduling." — three parallel items in a row is the
#1 AI tell. Use one concrete thing, or an uneven list.
- No em-dashes as drama. Real people use periods and commas. An em-dash in every paragraph reads
composed, not typed.
- No neat bows. Don't end every paragraph on a tidy summarizing clause. Let one trail off.
- No corporate parallelism. "It reads your email, drafts your replies, and books your meetings"
is too balanced. Break the rhythm.
- Lowercase is your friend for founder-voice cold email. Start sentences lowercase, skip the
capital-I. It reads tossed-off and personal.
- Let it ramble a little. One slightly run-on sentence, one throwaway line ("anyway, that's the
whole email") does more for authenticity than any clever phrase.
- Contractions and fragments. Write like a smart friend, not an applicant.
Test: read the draft aloud. If it sounds like it was performed, rewrite it rougher. If it sounds
like a guy typed it between meetings, ship it.
Subject lines (everything rides on this)
If it's invisible, nothing else matters. Rules:
- Short and lowercase. 2–6 words. "what if your assistant texted you first" beats "Boost Your
Productivity With AI-Powered Automation".
- Specific or curious, never generic. It should open a loop or name a real problem.
- Never "Quick question", "Following up", "Partnership opportunity", "Re:" fakery, or anything
with "!". These are pre-filed as spam.
- For an offer email, a concrete number/comparison works: "less than your coffee this week".
The 5-line structure (single email)
Subject: [specific, lowercase, curious]
[one line that names a problem they feel — or, if you have data on them, proof you paid attention]
[one line on the outcome, framed around them — time saved, not features]
[one line on what you're offering — the concrete capability, not the abstract benefit]
[low-friction ask: "worth a 2-min look?" / "got 5 min for a quick yes/no?"]
[first name only]
If you can't say it in ~5 lines, you don't understand the offer well enough yet.
Sequencing (the real money is here)
One email to a cold list is a wasted list. No-reply ≠ no. Run a 4–5 touch sequence, one every 2–3
days, where the ask escalates only as trust builds and each email earns the next open:
- Hook — pure curiosity, open a loop, no ask and often no link. The job is to be opened and
remembered, and to promise the next email.
- Value / show-don't-tell — one vivid, concrete capability as a tiny story. First soft CTA
("go try it") and/or a reply ask.
- Proof — a real "it caught something I'd have missed" story. The story is the value. CTA into
the product. (Per the Bible: the best follow-up isn't a nudge, it's news.)
- The offer — now the hard ask. Price, the outcome math, an honest qualifier. Real link.
- Close / recap — short recap since touches were spread out, restate the value trade, final
link. Don't say "last email from me" unless it truly is — it burns the channel if you send
more later.
Lead the sequence with whatever is genuinely news (a launch, going full-time, a real milestone) —
news rebuilds the relationship before you ask for anything.
CTAs
- One CTA per email. Two asks = zero conversions.
- Real links only. Never ship a placeholder or invented URL. Verify every link resolves.
- Friction matches trust. Early emails: a yes/no reply or a "just look" link. Late emails: the
purchase. Never lead with "buy" to someone three emails deep into not knowing you.
- A reply-ask ("what's the one thing you'd automate? hit reply") doubles as a deliverability signal —
inbox providers read replies as "this is wanted mail."
The offer / discount framing
- Give the discount a reason to exist. "40% off!!" reads as desperation and trains the list that
your email = coupons. "we just went full-time, locking in a founding-member price for early
folks" is a story the price lives inside. Believable beats loud.
- Anchor on outcome math. "if it saves you 20 minutes a day it's paid for itself ten times over."
Give people the arithmetic to justify it to themselves.
- One honest qualifier lifts everything. "if it's not useful to you yet, don't buy it, the free
tier isn't going anywhere." Counterintuitive, but it's the strongest anti-spam signal you can send.
- Real deadlines or none. Fake scarcity from a voice that was just honest poisons the trust.
About them, not you
Lead with the outcome for them, not the thing you built. Not "look what we shipped" but "this saves
your team five hours a week." First-person you, not first-person I. Even a founder story converts
by what it does for the reader, not by how it felt to the founder.
Founder asks (raising, intros, advice)
When the ask is "help me" instead of "buy this" — an angel raise, an intro, advice from someone you
admire — the discipline is the same (plain text, human, no marketing chrome) but the center of
gravity moves: lead with traction not the problem, ask for a 20-minute conversation not a
check, make it genuinely 1:1, and follow up with news not a nudge. See
references/founder-asks.md for the full principles, an annotated 3-email angel-raise thread, and
the forwardable warm-intro blurb.
A note on personalization & deliverability
Cold conversion ≈ personalization × deliverability. A converting cold email ideally opens with one
true, specific line about the recipient — something they shipped, posted, or use. With zero per-person
data, every opener is generic, which caps conversion no matter how good the rest is; you compensate by
making the story name a problem they recognize. If you have even one attribute per person (company,
role, a post), use it — it beats a generic blast by an order of magnitude. Deliverability (list
hygiene, domain reputation, sending volume) is a separate discipline but gates whether the copy is
ever read; see references/sequence-anatomy.md for the worked example and references/checklist.md
before sending.