line-editing

# Line Editing ## Overview Own the prose-quality passes that come after structure is settled: the line edit (sentence clarity, rhythm, precision, voice), character-voice differentiation, the copyedit against `style-sheet.md`, a read-aloud pass, and a proof pass on a built copy. Every change is proposed with a before/after and a one-line rationale so the author can accept or reject it. The author's voice is the standard, not the agent's taste. The `better-writing` skill, when installed, is an optional complement for anti-generic checks; this skill does not depend on it. ## Prerequisites A story project with `story.md` and drafted chapters (status `draft` or later). Read `style-sheet.md` if present; if it is missing or thin, build it first with the `voice-style` skill, because the copyedit checks against it. ## Language Read `language` in `story.md` (a BCP 47 tag such as `en-GB`, `fr`, or `ja`; a missing field means `en`). Edit in that language and to its grammar and conventions, and write edit notes in the language the user works in with you, quoting the prose exactly as written. The checklists' word-level advice (filter words, -ly adverbs, *said*, dialogue punctuation) is English: for another language, apply its aim, not its word lists, and take dialogue and punctuation from the style sheet and `references/language-conventions.md`. When `story prose` or `story voices` reports a check skipped for the book's language, or a check plainly does not fit it, do that pass by reading. ## When to Use - A chapter's structure is settled and the prose needs polish - Dialogue sounds the same from every speaker - Preparing a manuscript for beta readers, an editor, or submission - The `line`, `copyedit`, or `proof` revision pass is next in `story passes` - NOT for structural, plot, or continuity revision (use `revision-continuity`; line-edit only after those passes, or the polish is wasted) - NOT for setting house style or the voice description (use `voice-style`; this skill applies it) - NOT for scene-level craft such as deep POV, subtext, or exposition strategy (use `scene-craft`) - NOT for acting on external reader notes (use `feedback-triage`) - NOT for writing or scanning verse (use `verse-craft`); this skill only flags rhymes that slipped into prose by accident ## Workflow ### 1. Scope and permission 1. Ask which chapters and which pass: line edit, voice differentiation, copyedit, read-aloud, or proof. Default order is the one below. 2. Ask how heavy the edit should be: **light** (errors and clear improvements only), **medium** (tighten and clarify), or **heavy** (restructure sentences and paragraphs). Default to light. 3. Never rewrite a passage wholesale without explicit permission. Propose edits; apply only what the author accepts, or apply all on explicit instruction. 4. Snapshot before a multi-chapter pass (see Draft Snapshots in the `revision-continuity` skill), and mark the pass in progress. If `story.md` has no `revision-passes` yet, `story passes . --init` writes the default ladder first; `story passes .` shows where the book is. ```shell story passes . --start line ``` ### 2. Line edit 1. Read `story.md` (POV, tense, Tone & Style), the style sheet's Voice section, and the chapter. Run `story prose .` for the chapter's counts. If the style sheet has no `samples`, suggest the author list an earlier book or chapters they are happy with (see the `voice-style` skill), so the counts are measured against their own voice. A `prose-baseline-*` warning shows where a chapter drifts from it: use it to find passages to reread, and keep any drift the author meant. 2. Work paragraph by paragraph with `references/line-edit-checklist.md`: clarity, precision, economy, rhythm, POV distance, and voice. 3. Present edits in the format in `references/edit-note-format.md`: location, before, after, and one line of rationale. Group by paragraph; lead with the highest-impact changes; cap a batch at about 20 so the author can review them. 4. Leave passages that are unusual but deliberate. When unsure whether a quirk is voice or error, ask. 5. To check a rewritten passage before putting it in the chapter, pipe it in: `story prose - < rewrite.md` lints it against the style sheet, and `story voices - < rewrite.md` checks its dialogue against the characters' `voice-avoid` lists. ### 3. Differentiate character voices ```shell story voices . ``` The report fingerprints each character's attributed dialogue (sentence length, contractions, questions, exclamations, signature words) and warns when two voices are near-identical, when a character says a `voice-avoid` word, and when a `voice-words` entry never appears. 1. For near-identical pairs, read both characters' Voice & Speech Patterns sections and propose line-level changes that follow them: vocabulary, sentence length, what each avoids saying, how each deflects. See the voice section of `references/line-edit-checklist.md`. 2. If a character file has no voice notes, propose `voice-words` and `voice-avoid` lists drawn from their best existing lines, and ask before adding them to the character file. 3. A line is attributed only when the narration names the speaker next to a speech verb or, failing that, names exactly one character in the paragraph. Pronoun tags (`she said`) and untagged lines are invisible to the report, so the POV character in close third is often under-counted; read those lines by hand, or name the tags in a sample chapter and rerun. The near-identical warning reads "X and Y may sound alike" and needs five or more lines from each character. ### 4. Copyedit 1. Mark the pass: `story passes . --start copyedit`. 2. Run `story prose .` and fix every avoided spelling. Then work through `references/copyedit-checklist.md` against `style-sheet.md`: grammar, punctuation, dialogue punctuation, capitalisation, hyphenation, numbers, and consistency of names and terms (check the glossary). For a book not in English, take dialogue and punctuation conventions from `references/language-conventions.md`; if the style sheet has not recorded them, settle them with the author first. 3. Record every new decision in `style-sheet.md` in the same change, so the next chapter follows it. 4. Tell the user plainly: this is a consistency and correctness pass, not a substitute for a professional copyeditor on a book going to print. ### 5. Read-aloud pass Follow `references/read-aloud-guide.md`. Build the narration script: ```shell story build . --format narration ``` Offer to play chapters with the system's text-to-speech if one is installed (`say` on macOS; `espeak-ng` or `spd-say` on Linux). Check with `command -v`; ask before installing anything. Choose a voice for the book's `language` (`say -v '?'` and `espeak-ng --voices` list them); an English voice reading another language is no test of the prose. Listen for stumbles, unintended rhymes, tongue-twisters, and runs of same-length sentences; record them as edit notes. ### 6. Proof pass 1. Mark the pass: `story passes . --start proof`. 2. Build the copy the reader will see: ```shell story build . --format html story build . --format print --trim 6x9 ``` 3. Proof against `references/copyedit-checklist.md`'s proof section: typos introduced by editing, doubled or missing words, broken scene breaks, chapter headings, matter pages, widows and orphans in the print copy. Cite locations by the HTML copy's paragraph anchors (`ch03-p12`). 4. Rendering the print HTML to PDF needs a paged-media engine the user installs (Paged.js CLI, WeasyPrint, or Prince); ask before installing. ### 7. Close the pass 1. Summarise what changed, what was kept on purpose, and any style-sheet or character-file updates. 2. Update chapter `status` only when the author agrees (`draft` to `revised`). 3. Mark the pass done, for example `story passes . --done line`, and run CLI Maintenance. ## Conventions - The author's voice wins. Edit toward what the prose is already trying to do, not toward a generic "good prose" standard. - One rationale line per change, naming the effect (*clearer subject*, *cuts a filter word*, *restores past tense*), never "sounds better". - Edits are made directly in the chapter markdown, below `## Chapter Text`; never through a script that rewrites prose in bulk. - Style decisions go in `style-sheet.md`; voice decisions about a character go in the character file (`voice-words`, `voice-avoid`, Voice & Speech Patterns), which stays canon. - A line edit does not change events, facts, or who knows what. If an edit would, stop and hand it to `revision-continuity`. ## CLI Maintenance Use the Story CLI when it is available. If `story` is not installed, use `bun run story --` from the Story Skills repository checkout or the bundled fallback `node ../story-maintenance/scripts/story.js` with the same arguments, resolving the path relative to this skill folder. If no CLI is available, apply the checklists by reading and keep word counts current by hand. After editing chapters, character voice fields, or the style sheet: ```shell story wordcount . --write story prose . story voices . story links . story validate . ``` ## Reference Files - **`references/line-edit-checklist.md`** - Paragraph-level line edit checks (clarity, precision, economy, rhythm, POV distance, voice) and character-voice differentiation levers - **`references/copyedit-checklist.md`** - Copyedit and proof checks against the style sheet: grammar, punctuation, dialogue punctuation, consistency, and the proof pass on built copies - **`references/read-aloud-guide.md`** - Running a read-aloud pass with the narration build and OS text-to-speech, and what to listen for - **`references/language-conventions.md`** - Dialogue and punctuation conventions by language (quote marks, dialogue dashes, spacing before punctuation, Spanish ¿¡, CJK brackets), and how to record them in the style sheet - **`references/edit-note-format.md`** - How to present edits to the author: before/after with rationale, batching, and recording accepted and rejected changes ## Shared Conventions Every story skill follows the shared conventions in [`../story-maintenance/references/conventions.md`](../story-maintenance/references/conventions.md), resolved relative to this skill folder. Read it before creating, renaming, or linking story files. If that file is missing because this skill was installed without `story-maintenance`, the essentials are: kebab-case ids and filenames, YAML frontmatter on every story-project file, `_index.md` files as the authoritative registries, bidirectional links between entities, `characters` for who is on the page and `mentions` for who is only referred to, `status: deceased` plus `died-in: chapter-{NN}` for deaths, and no project-local generator or build scripts (run only the installed or bundled Story CLI).