prose-style-reference

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Prose Style Reference

Heavy reference for extended writing tasks. For the condensed rules, see writing-clearly-and-concisely.

Part 1: Composition Principles (Strunk)

Based on William Strunk Jr.'s The Elements of Style (1918). These rules produce clear, forceful prose.

Active Voice

The active voice is more direct and vigorous than the passive.

Passive	Active
My first visit to Boston will always be remembered by me.	I shall always remember my first visit to Boston.
A survey of this region was made in 1900.	This region was surveyed in 1900.
There were a great number of dead leaves lying on the ground.	Dead leaves covered the ground.
The sound of a guitar somewhere in the house could be heard.	Somewhere in the house a guitar hummed sleepily.
It was not long before he was very sorry that he had said what he had.	He soon repented his words.

Eliminate perfunctory expressions: there is, there are, it was, could be heard. Replace with verbs that do work.

The passive is acceptable when the receiver of the action is the topic of the paragraph, or when the actor is unknown or unimportant.

Positive Form

Make definite assertions. Use not for denial or antithesis, never evasion.

Negative evasion	Positive form
He was not very often on time.	He usually came late.
did not remember	forgot
did not pay any attention to	ignored
did not have much confidence in	distrusted
not important	trifling

The reader wants to be told what is, not what is not.

Concrete Language

Prefer the specific to the general, the definite to the vague.

Abstract	Concrete
A period of unfavourable weather set in.	It rained every day for a week.
He showed satisfaction as he took possession of his well-earned reward.	He grinned as he pocketed the coin.
In proportion as the manners, customs, and amusements of a nation are cruel and barbarous, the regulations of their penal code will be severe.	In proportion as men delight in battles, bull-fights, and combats of gladiators, will they punish by hanging, burning, and the rack.

The surest way to hold the reader's attention is to be specific, definite, and concrete.

Omit Needless Words

A sentence should contain no unnecessary words, a paragraph no unnecessary sentences, for the same reason that a drawing should have no unnecessary lines and a machine no unnecessary parts.

Wordy	Concise
the question as to whether	whether
there is no doubt but that	doubtless
used for fuel purposes	used for fuel
he is a man who	he
in a hasty manner	hastily
owing to the fact that	since
in spite of the fact that	though
call your attention to the fact that	remind you
the fact that he had not succeeded	his failure

Revise the fact that out of every sentence. Eliminate who is, which was when superfluous:

Wordy	Concise
His brother, who is a member of the same firm	His brother, a member of the same firm
Trafalgar, which was Nelson's last battle	Trafalgar, Nelson's last battle

Combine step-by-step presentation of a single idea into one sentence:

51 words	26 words
Macbeth was very ambitious. This led him to wish to become king of Scotland. The witches told him that this wish of his would come true. The king of Scotland at this time was Duncan. Encouraged by his wife, Macbeth murdered Duncan. He was thus enabled to succeed Duncan as king.	Encouraged by his wife, Macbeth achieved his ambition and realised the prediction of the witches by murdering Duncan and becoming king of Scotland in his place.

Emphatic Endings

Place the most important words at the end of the sentence.

Weak ending	Strong ending
Humanity has hardly advanced in fortitude since that time, though it has advanced in many other ways.	Humanity, since that time, has advanced in many other ways, but it has hardly advanced in fortitude.
This steel is principally used for making razors, because of its hardness.	Because of its hardness, this steel is principally used in making razors.

The beginning of a sentence is the other strong position. Any element other than the subject becomes emphatic when placed first: "Deceit or treachery he could never forgive."

Parallel Structure

Express co-ordinate ideas in similar form.

Broken parallel	Parallel
Formerly, science was taught by the textbook method, while now the laboratory method is employed.	Formerly, science was taught by the textbook method; now it is taught by the laboratory method.
It was both a long ceremony and very tedious.	The ceremony was both long and tedious.
A time not for words, but action.	A time not for words, but for action.

Correlative expressions (both/and, not/but, either/or) must be followed by the same grammatical construction.

Paragraph Discipline

• One paragraph per topic.
• Begin with a topic sentence; end in conformity with the beginning.
• Vary sentence structure to avoid monotonous loose-sentence chains.

One Tense in Summaries

When summarising, choose present or past tense and hold it throughout. Shifting tenses signals uncertainty.

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Part 2: AI Writing Patterns

LLMs regress to statistical means. Specific, unusual, nuanced facts (statistically rare) are replaced with generic, inflated descriptions (statistically common). The subject becomes simultaneously less specific and more exaggerated.

Puffery and Inflated Importance

LLMs puff up significance by attaching claims about broader impact, legacy, or symbolism:

• "marking a pivotal moment in the evolution of..."
• "stands as a testament to..."
• "plays a vital/significant/crucial/pivotal role"
• "underscores/highlights its importance/significance"
• "reflects broader trends in..."
• "symbolising its ongoing/enduring/lasting impact"
• "deeply rooted", "profound heritage", "steadfast dedication"
• "indelible mark", "key turning point"

These statements are synthesis: a disembodied narrator claiming what something means rather than stating what it does.

Superficial "-ing" Analysis

Attaching present participle phrases to make empty claims about significance:

• "ensuring reliability across deployments"
• "highlighting the importance of community engagement"
• "showcasing the framework's capabilities"
• "reflecting a commitment to innovation"
• "underscoring the need for further research"

Stronger tell: when the subject of these verbs is a fact, event, or inanimate thing. A person can highlight something; a railway station cannot.

Promotional Language

• "continues to captivate", "stunning natural beauty"
• "groundbreaking" (figurative), "cutting-edge"
• "nestled", "in the heart of", "boasts a"
• "seamless", "robust", "streamlined"

Say what it does. Be specific, not grandiose.

Overused AI Vocabulary

Words that co-occur heavily in LLM output. Where there is one, there are likely others:

aligns/aligning with, crucial, delve/delving, emphasising, enduring, enhance/enhancing, fostering, garnered/garnering, highlight/highlighting (as verb), interplay, intricate/intricacies, key (adjective), landscape (figurative), leveraging, multifaceted, notably, nuanced, realm, robust, seamless/seamlessly, shed light on, showcasing, streamline, tapestry, testament, underpinning, underscores/underscoring, vibrant, vital

Didactic Disclaimers

• "it's important/critical/crucial to note/remember/consider"
• "may vary", "it's worth mentioning"

Delete these. If the information matters, state it directly.

Empty Conclusions

• "In summary...", "In conclusion...", "Overall..."
• Restating what was already said

End with the last substantive point, not a summary of it.

Challenges and Future Prospects

The rigid formula: "Despite its [positive words], [subject] faces challenges..." followed by vague optimism about potential initiatives. Eliminate this pattern entirely.

Formatting Overuse

• Excessive boldface on every key term
• Inline-header vertical lists (bold header + colon + description)
• Emoji decorations on headings or bullets
• Em dash overuse in place of commas, parentheses, or colons

Synonym Variance

LLMs avoid repeating words by cycling through synonyms (protagonist, key player, eponymous character). Prefer natural repetition over forced variation. Use the clearest term consistently.

False Ranges

"From X to Y" constructions where no meaningful scale exists between the endpoints. LLMs use these to sound comprehensive. If you cannot identify a coherent middle ground, the range is false.

Rule of Three

LLMs overuse triplets: "adjective, adjective, and adjective" or "short phrase, short phrase, and short phrase." One precise word beats three vague ones.

Negative Parallelisms

"Not only X, but Y" and "It is not just about X, it's about Y" - common in LLM output, often unsuitable for neutral tone. Use sparingly and only when the contrast is genuine.